Still interesting. :) I want to find out more about the world and how it works.
Same issue with the sentence structure.
I wonder why she is being so violent and reacting so much to the rather juvenile taunts of the boys - young men - around her. Is she trying to fit in like 'one of the boys'? Is she that immature herself? Inquiring minds want to know! :)
Sometimes you have to make chapter breaks. You could alter your transition from morning classes to lunch in such a way that it would give you a good place to break up the chapter. Sometimes internal thoughts are a good tool to use for creating those spaces.
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Date: 2006-12-10 04:18 pm (UTC)Same issue with the sentence structure.
I wonder why she is being so violent and reacting so much to the rather juvenile taunts of the boys - young men - around her. Is she trying to fit in like 'one of the boys'? Is she that immature herself? Inquiring minds want to know! :)
Sometimes you have to make chapter breaks. You could alter your transition from morning classes to lunch in such a way that it would give you a good place to break up the chapter. Sometimes internal thoughts are a good tool to use for creating those spaces.