ext_118156 ([identity profile] sannask.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] kageisuke 2007-10-03 02:45 pm (UTC)

intriguing.

"she was instantly weary."
tired or on her guard? if the latter, you want 'wary.'

"PS’s [Percorso di Salvezza ]"
spell out PS the first time you use it. after that, use the abbreviation.

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